I am feeling fairly confident with my latest story draft, as I feel it really ties up loose ends.
There are several changes made in this draft, including entire sentences being altered. I made these changes for various different reasons.
- I wanted to create a better flow with the wording so it rolls off the tongue more.
- I wanted to make the story as grammatically correct as possible.
- I also had to alter certain lines that maybe mightn’t of fully made sense to a young child.
- There was parts of the story such as , ‘Little Ruby stood up and clapped aloud”, in which I altered to “Little Ruby flew down and chirped aloud”. The purpose of this particular change was to make the story more realistic. Dan made the observation during a meeting that a Robin would not sleep under a tree and it would chirp rather than clap.
- This is why I looked into parts of the story like this one in more detail. Overall, I am happy with where my story is right now, I feel I have made solid changes throughout the different drafts which resulted in it being vey much improved.
Amy O' Reilly 